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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 03:06 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Aik Nazm,

Jin Pe Hum Dil Haray Hain
Andaaz Buhat He Pyaray Hain

Kabhi Lekar Shokhi Ankhon Main
Meray Dil Main Halchal Ker Dena
Kabhi Meethi Meethi Baton Se
Meray Dil Ko Pagal Ker Jaana

Kabhi Kaan Ko Rakh Ke Seenay Pe
Meray Dil Ki Dharkan Sun Lena
Meray Gaal Pe Aaker Chupke Se
Kabhi Koochi Koochi Ker Jaana

Meri Aankh Pe Aanchal Ka
Rangeen Sa Saaya Ker Rakhna
Kabhi Aaker Meray Cheheray Per
Ghani Zulf Ka Baal Ker Jaana

Meray Hath Ko Lekar Hathon Main
Kabhi Apne Dil Pe Rakh Dena
Kabhi Aaker Meri Baanhon Main
Khud He Chupke Chupke Bhar Jaana

Meray Hont Pe Rakhna Hont Kabhi
Aur Rooh Meri Dehka Dena
Kabhi Apni Jheel Si Aankhon Main
Meray Pyar Ka Kaajal Ker Jaana

Iqraar Ke Lafz Sunanay Ko
Kabhi Ghanton Mujh Ko Tarsaana
Kabhi Kaan Main Meray Chupke Se
Izhaar Khud He Se Ker Jaana

Andaaz Ye Saaray Nyaray Hain
Hum Ko Jaan Se Pyaray Hain
Isi Leay To Inn Pe Hum
Apna Sab Kuch Haaray Hain

(Ahmer)

Umeed Hai Aap Logon Ko Pasand Aye Gi..

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Main Pal Do Pal Ka Shayer Hoon
Pal Do Pal Meri Kahani Hai..
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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 03:53 AM   #2 (permalink)
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So sweet :-)
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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 03:57 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 04:37 AM   #4 (permalink)
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ji.......yaqeenan pasand aai hy.........thanks






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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 06:38 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Old Jun 9th, 2008, 07:04 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Iqraar Ke Lafz Sunanay Ko
Kabhi Ghanton Mujh Ko Tarsaana
Kabhi Kaan Main Meray Chupke Se
Izhaar Khud He Se Ker Jaana

Andaaz Ye Saaray Nyaray Hain
Hum Ko Jaan Se Pyaray Hain
Isi Leay To Inn Pe Hum
Apna Sab Kuch Haaray Hain
Beeautifulll...






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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 01:00 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 01:20 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Verrrrrrrrrrrrry Very Nice..............bohat zabardast..........thanks for sharing.....
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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 04:49 AM   #9 (permalink)
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"The death from which you flee will truly overtake you: then you will be sent back to the Knower of things secret and open: and He will tell you (the truth of) the things that you did!" (Surat al-Jumu'ah: 8).
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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 05:57 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 11:13 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Jia dharak dharak... Jia dharak dharak jaye
My Countdown Counting down to: nada
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Old Jun 10th, 2008, 11:47 PM   #12 (permalink)
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~mujhaY kis jurm ki saza mili k meRi rooh taak hai thaki huwi
maiN apni jaga se hila nahi meRi saans phiR be ukhaR gaye~
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Old Jun 11th, 2008, 02:44 AM   #13 (permalink)
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Old Jun 11th, 2008, 10:40 AM   #14 (permalink)
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nice thoughts RI....very nicely written poem.






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Old Jun 11th, 2008, 03:59 PM   #15 (permalink)
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hmm pasand aaya ye andaz e mohabut, kuch kahilana sa jis main sub kuch dosra hee karay tu karay, gudest g.
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Old Jun 12th, 2008, 03:34 PM   #16 (permalink)
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Meray Gaal Pe Aaker Chupke Se
Kabhi Koochi Koochi Ker Jaana

soooo cute.....
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overall, a very romantic ghazal






Speak less to people U love the most...
cuz if they can't understand ur silence
they can never understand ur words...
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Old Jun 13th, 2008, 12:23 AM   #17 (permalink)
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Old Jun 13th, 2008, 09:42 AM   #18 (permalink)
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Old Jun 14th, 2008, 06:45 PM   #19 (permalink)
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nice poem,. Ahmer.






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Old Jun 15th, 2008, 04:14 AM   #20 (permalink)
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Old Jun 15th, 2008, 09:55 PM   #21 (permalink)
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I've kissed millions of frogs, but still no prince charming...
Åchi ßachi Çlub
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Old Jun 16th, 2008, 06:10 AM   #23 (permalink)
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Ahmar meiN ney ab tak image nahi banaya sorry , i just saw Ali jee he is also a good designer.... if u in hurry aap unsey bhi poochh saktey heiN:-)






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log be-dard heiN PhooloN ko massal detay heiN
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Old Jul 29th, 2008, 01:32 AM   #29 (permalink)
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wow zabardast...

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